Grimlock ♥ Ultra Magnus

Sighs. GR ate my longer review. 

I don't have the energy or will to write it all out again. So, poor worldbuilding? Check. A dominant race of women, who own men as slaves, and yet their BDSM gives Corbin comfort when he's feeling crappy because he didn't get his hit of drugs. Women in an caretaker role negates you positioning them as slaveowners who don't care about the males. Fail. 

The characters are just weak. They contradict each other all the time. 

The sex scenes are the oppostie of sexy. 

I'll continue the rest of the novel with detailed grammar issues and such. 

"He squeezed her, much smaller, hand gently every now and then, giving Yani comfort."

I"m discomforted by how poorly you use commas. I'll be dealing with this by reading TF porn that is a million times more well written than this bullshit. 

"His heart rate began to beat back to normal and he took several deep breaths."

There are so many not awkward ways to say this. Emma Paul bypassed them all and went with... this. 

"The feelings stabbing her heart rose like a flood, until she felt the knot in the center of her chest threatening to overflow into a torrent of uncontrollable..."

So, they stabbed your heart, which rose like a flood? That might be your heart being lifted by all the blood you're hemorrhaging, you know?

"Tears weld up in her eyes."

And it's dinner time. Which is so much more appealing than continuing. Which I will. Maybe tomorrow.

** edit - I never went back to do more of this because the book was so poorly written I just couldn't.