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allhailgrimlock

Grimlock ♥ Ultra Magnus

I'm a well read grad student who's bluntly honest about all things, although I try to be most honest about myself.   

Currently reading

Separate Orbits
Yael Mermelstein
Progress: 119/427pages
BATMAN #53 ((Regular Cover)) - DC Comics - 2018 - 1st Printing
LeeWeeksBatman53, TomKingBatman53
BATMAN #54 ((Regular Cover)) - DC Comics - 2018 - 1st Printing
MattWagnerBatman54, TomKingBatman54
BATMAN #52 ((DC REBIRTH)) ((Regular Cover)) - DC Comics - 2018 - 1st Printing
LeeWeeksBatman52, TomKingBatman52
BATMAN #51 ((DC REBIRTH)) ((Regular Cover)) - DC Comics - 2018 - 1st Printing
LeeWeeksBatman51, TomKingBatman51
Infinity Wars: Iron Hammer (2018) #1 (of 2)
Al Ewing, Humberto Ramos
Champions (2019-) #4
Jim Zub, Jacinto Benavente
SUICIDE SQUAD #46 ((Regular Cover)) - DC Comics - 2018 - 1st Printing
JosLuisSS46, RobWilliamsSS46
SUICIDE SQUAD #45 ((SINK ATLANTIS)) ((DC REBIRTH )) ((Regular Cover)) - DC Comics - 2018 - 1st Printing
JosLuisSuicideSquad45, RobWilliamsSuicideSquad45
Champions (2019-) #3
Jim Zub, Jacinto Benavente

Reading progress update: I've read 114 out of 368 pages.

Flawed - Cecelia Ahern

"Objects pelt me, extra security hold the crowd back as they pulsate at me..."

 

Pulsate at feels like an odd choice.   Around would feel less odd.   But really, something that described more of the riot going on would be way more appropriate. 

 

"I arrive back at the holding cell, covered in whatever filth people have spat and thrown at me..."

 

Why would you not use thrown first.   'Whatever filth people have thrown at me,' makes sense.   People were throwing filth and will wash their hands later.   'Whatever filth people have thrown and spat at me,' still has spat go back to filth.   But especially with spat first it implies they have filth in their mouth that they have spat at her.   I have to admit to laughing out loud at this. 

 

"I arrive back at the holding cell, covered in whatever filth people have thrown at me," actually does just fine.   If you have to mention spitting I would do so separately.   Because otherwise what are they putting in their mouth?  Garbage?   Worse?   Y'know what, never mind, I don't wanna know...