Grimlock ♥ Ultra Magnus

As I was reading this, I was in awe of how badly it was put together: the sentence structure, the fact that it glosses over things, or just plain gets them wrong.  I didn't think I could be more disappointed until I got to the end - and saw that the author and his wife edit and run a small publishing house. 

What now?

Sit down, people, this is gonna be long, and I'm gonna school you on all the ways this book could have been an awesome introduction to Deadpool.

"A man in a blue outfit stand sin the now stillness."

Now stillness is a horrible way to describe sudden stillness/inaction/whatever he's trying to say. 

Sudden stillness would have been a far superior phrase. 

"As the remnants of various items falling to the floor, wood cracking from its buckling and the lights above swinging side to side in a shaken fashion - casting dancing shadows across the debris - the dust in the library starts to settle."

It's like the author got distracted by the purple prose in the middle of the sentence that he forgot what he was originally writing.   Let me take that bullshit out and show you what's wrong.   (And this sentence was so convoluted and wrong that it took me a while to figure out what was wrong.)

As the remnants of the various items falling to the floor, the dust in the library starts to settle.

That's the main sentence, and it's wrong. 

How do you offer editing services?

"The comparison went a step further, Deadpool's character's name becoming Wade Wilson."

First of all, this glosses over, even discounts the intent of the naming in my opinion.   He didn't just happen to be named Wade Wilson - as opposed to Deathstroke who is Slade Wilson - but he was named that because he was so similar to Deathstroke.   It was a tongue-in-cheek acknowledgement, an inside joke. 

That point doesn't touch the sloppiness of this sentence.   

Acknowledging the similarities, the creators took their homage a step further, naming Deadpool 'Wade Wilson.'   

Works a little better, right?   It also acknowledges the connection instead of acting as if the naming was in a vacuum. 

"Deadpool's real name in the comic book world is Wade Winston Wilson, and is considered an antihero-not unlike Batman, Daredevil, Wolverine or the Punisher."

So before I unpack everything else wrong with this sentence, Deadpool's name is considered an antihero.  I saw how that was written and giggled in pubic, guys. 

Secondly, why are you repeating his name?   His middle name is not often used, so since that's the only new information you gave us, I assume that you felt the need to add it.   The problem is this feels like someone showing off obscure information to show they can rather than revealing something about the character.  It also messes up your sentence here. 

Third point: Wolverine is an antihero, as is The Punisher.   Why are Batman and Daredevil in that list?   Are they seriously the best examples of antihero you can find, especially when comparing them to Deadpool?  Deadpool, Wolverine, and Punisher will kill if necessary, and Deadpool does so for money while Punisher goes out of his way to kill criminals. 

Wolverine will try not to kill, but if he thinks it's the best way to keep innocent people or his friends safe, he is down for it.   

Daredevil and Batman will not kill.   (I've been reading a bit about Batman being considered an antihero, and I'm not going to argue here.  I'm just going to say he's killed in the comics, even apparently early on, and I can't remember if DD has.   Regardless, it's something they really try hard to avoid, would feel guilty over, et, which separates them from the other three.)

"...facially disfigured..."

Ignoring the rest of his body which is also disfigured?

His mask "doubles as a protector against others figuring out his identity."

And ties into his face looking like it does.   So first of all, he's pretty loosy-goosy about his identity.   It's clear that his mask really is just about the facial disfigurement.  After all, he exposes his body all the time, but is shy about taking off the mask.

However, this is a good time to talk about that doublethink, and the author completely glosses it over, and in fact, gives us the impression that it's just his face that is disfigured.    Bad move, because someone like me will come along, and point out that you should have talked about some of this. 

"This is technically called, breaking the fourth wall."

And that's technically called an unnecessary comma.

"As with all superheroes, Deadpool has a super power: self-healing, similar to that of the X-Men's Wolverine character."

HOLYSHIT!   He's actually going to use this sentence without explaining that Wolverine's healing factor was grafted onto Deadpool. 

That's just... this was the low point in the book for me.

"While is psychosis can be considered a handicap, it benefits him also by giving him the ability to foreshadow the movies of his opponent - he knows the attack that coming before it happens."

Not according to Marvel.

"The character Taskmaster even had a hard time fighting Deadpool... because of Deadpool's erratic and unpredictable fighting patterns."

This comes right after the last sentence, as if it proves that Deadpool can predict Taskmaster's moves.   It can't.   The two are unrelated.   Also, you made the one about him predicting stuff up, so...

"The character T-Ray claims in Deadpool #33 that his is the real Wade Wilson and that Deadpool is a vicious murdered who stole his identity."

Seriously, how do you edit stuff?

"...and also deals with his opponents by supposedly being able to read issues of other characters comic books."

Giving off the impression he does this all the time.   In truth, he doesn't do it all that often.   Lately, it's only been in the 'previously in' Deadpool pages up front, where he reminds himself what's happened last month. 

And I think he mostly reads his own books.   

"Deadpool is rumored to be breaking the forth wall..."

Is that anything like breaking the fourth wall?

"He's very intelligent, is an organ donor, and is bisexual."

Pansexual.   Pansexual.  Pansexual. 

Bisexual=/=pansexual.

"Steve and his wife run aLife Beyond Books, a publishing house and editing service for authors who write about living life a little differently than the status quo."

WTF how?   Did you just not use any editing services, despite owning one?  How?   How did this happen?

How do you offer editing services?