Grimlock ♥ Ultra Magnus

3%: "The sun was setting far out in the distance, which rarely saw due to his sleep schedule."

Missing word.   So far the only mistake, but I'm so, so jaded when it comes to SP works in general.   We'll see how this goes. 

4%: 

"Jack and Ben made a beeline through boisterous chanting and high pitched squabbling.

Stone, Shaun (2015-09-04). Blue Karma (Kindle Location 58). Shaun Michael Stone. Kindle Edition."

Well, you can't really cut through noise like that.   The boisterous crowd?   Yes, you can make a beeline through that.   And you'd want to if they were all doing that 'high pitched squabbling' thing. 

So far, this needs an editor pretty badly.