Grimlock ♥ Ultra Magnus

Maybe in the hopes that one day, one robot erotica won't be just the same old exploitative sex-box trope-y story.   This, sadly, is not that day.   Nor was yesterday, but I was too tired to write the review then. 

Because other than being that same old thing, the writing isn't very good.   Which, y'know, makes it stand out even less.   

"..Sophie's perfectly hanging breasts..."

"...his eyes now down to the floor in embarrassment..."

How many times do I have to point out that eyes=/=gazes.   Eyes do the gazing, and the gazing roams.  Because eyes on the floor=dirty eyes. 

"Without thinking outreached her hands towards it."

I can't even remember when in the story this takes place, just that I finally got tired of the half-sentences pretending to be sentences.   Clauses.   Sentence structure.   There is no understanding of either shown in this short. 

"The adrenaline of waiting to grab the keycard unnoticed, the pain in knowing her plan could dismantle the magic she and Nex had shared the night before,e and the guilt she felt knowing that she was going to enjoy every second of this."

For a clause this long, this should be a sentence, but it isn't.   Also, I'm pretty sure she doesn't really understand how adrenaline works.  

"Her eyes dropped to the floor with his belt momentarily, before jumping back up to meet his gaze once more."

Wow, there's a lot wrong with this sentence beyond mixing up gazes and eyes.   This implies that his belt also was only on the floor momentary.   Maybe it bounced back up when her eyes did?   

"She confirmed, lifting her mouth from his cock only long enough to pull Nex down to the floor by his."

I'm assuming she's using his cock as a handle, but not sure?

Yeah, pretty much the whole story was like this.   Ugh. Fail.