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I'm a well read grad student who's bluntly honest about all things, although I try to be most honest about myself.   

Currently reading

Apex Magazine Issue 99
Allison Mills, Rebecca Roanhorse, Pamela Rentz, Mari Kurisato, Raymond Sturgis, Jason Sizemore, Daniel Heath Justice
Extracurricular Activities: A Tor.com Original
Yoon Ha Lee
Progress: 38/38pages
River of Teeth
Sarah Gailey
Progress: 113/113pages
Provenance
Ann Leckie
Progress: 148/432pages
Down Among the Sticks and Bones
Seanan McGuire
Progress: 176/176pages
The Black Tides of Heaven
JY Yang
Progress: 132/150pages
Raven Stratagem
Yoon Ha Lee
Progress: 400/400pages
Discount Armageddon
Seanan McGuire
Progress: 20/312pages
Transformers Robots in Disguise: Where Crown City Comes to Life
Caroline Rowlands
Progress: 3/32pages
Avengers: Absolute Vision - Book Two (Avengers (1963-1996))
Brian Garvey, Jimmy Akin, Roger Stern, Steve Ditko, Carmine Infantino, Al Milgrom, Prentice Hall
Progress: 98/360pages

Liked the ideas, liked the execution, but where was the editing?

A Man Like Me: A Science Fiction Short Story - Austin Grisham

So, good idea, good general execution.   Bad editing. 

 

So let's get the good out of the way: it was a thoughtful story with a twist at the end that I simply did not see.   That author played this straight throughout, so it was a pretty big shock.   The narrative ploys were all incredibly well done. 

 

And then there was the grammar. 

 

"He had not seen much of anything useful than some twisted metal when he noticed a large silver crate, clearly battered by the elements, but nonetheless still intact."

 

Missing word. 

 

"These infernal brains of mine, why won't it let me know my past?"

 

Brain/it and brains/them.   But there is a definite issue here. 

 

"'Sort of like the other day when you thought those shadows and trees was a monster?'"

 

Were, not was.   There's a repeated pattern here, where the tenses and numbers of things don't match up. 

 

".)."

 

Choose where the period goes.   Use one per sentence, please. 

 

And I'm kinda freaked out about this review.   He's asking for Amazon reviews, but says this: 

 

"Your feedback is very important to me; I read every review."